Is this a good start for a story? - pillow and popcorn pictuers
I write a story, and that is what I have to this day.
"High Five"
I take the pillow behind me and use it to find the arm. It hits me again and ends with her throwing pieces of popcorn and chips on each individual hair. I wept and laughed like crazy, and exhausted into his bed, arms and legs.
Wednesday, November 4, 2009
Pillow And Popcorn Pictuers Is This A Good Start For A Story?
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Not a very good opening at all. Stories have things in them as a reader for your interest ... Pillows and popcorn are all too common. The stories have to begin by the reader about the characters and where they are, who they are and why they are there. And no matter what they do, it has some exceptional reasons.
[In addition, write "Maniac" evil.]
It is the "High Five" of history, or is the title? If you are part of the story, such as the abolition of the opening line. Furthermore, it is generally preferable to write a story in the past, you will find as you progress start mixing past / present when writing in this genre, and the ruins of history. Time tends to sound better too.
Sorry, but no. It lacks the sense of mystery, something that would make a great hook readers. When I read something like this book, I would not think twice to get back on the shelves.
Sorry if this seems harsh, but true.
Okay, but do not hold me to reading the rest. Maybe I should start with some onomatopoeia that:
SMACK! He got me in the arm. A presence of evil, as the crossing was reciprocated features ...
Okay.
Not my kind of fiction, but whatever.
I really can not have found a good solid answer, because they have not been much to continue.
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High Five "are drugs?" And I would put "legs" if I were you.
It's a bit boring, but when I read the propaganda might make more sense.
sounds good
perhaps for propaganda or something
must be a little more exciting
sounds good
perhaps for propaganda or something
must be a little more exciting
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